My community paper was the writing assignment I turned in that I felt needed the most revision. Aside from formatting I seemed to miss the concept of the assignment. My thesis was clear, but in my paper I did not support it through the use of evidence and a clear line of argument. The paper clearly lacked organization I feel. I also feel I could have done a better job with synthesizing the quotes; this would have avoided the “drop in” effect. The voice of the paper was also in the wrong format my use of I’s and you’s should have been omitted. The conclusion I found hard to rewrite, even though it may be incorrect for the assignment, I feel for the way, and the context of how this paper was written even though incorrect the conclusion fits that version of the writing. This was the assignment that I turned it that I thought I would be receiving a fabulous grade on, but when I received the paper back graded it was anything but fabulous. This is the point even though late in the quarter I started to really look deeper into the questions and the assignments to see what is really being asked.
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